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Jeff The Killer: Sweet dreams are made of screams by Anyerina
Your P.O.V

You rolled your eyes and shook your head.

"Why?" Jeff said.

"Cause the leader has a huge crush on her.." Chris said.

 "And I will never date him." you said.

"Why?" BEN said.

"Cause he is such a womanizer.." you said.

"Oh....." he said.

"Either way, what are you going (y/n)?" Chris said.

You sighed "I don't know.."

You walked away and climbed up the highest ramp. You put on your headphones and listen to music.

Jeff's P.O.V

"She doesn't look happy.." Chris said.

"She didn't sound happy either.." BEN said.

"What can she do?" I said.

" I don't know.." Chris said.

I was thinking of a plan but BEN gave me a his 'I have an idea' look.

"What is it BEN?" I said.

"What if...this guy...leaves her alone when he finds out that (y/n) has a boyfriend?" BEN said.

"We could try that but who will be (y/n)'s boyfriend to convince him?" Chris said.

Then they all looked at me and I nodded.

"What do I do?" I said, all smiling.

"Go up there with her, put an arm around her and give her a kiss." BEN said.

"Alright." I said when my smile is getting bigger.

"Okay, I'll go tell the leader that (y/n) has a boyfriend and see how it goes." Chris said.

I nodded and walked up to (y/n) while Chris, BEN, and Jack went to tell the leader. I climbed up the ramp and sat next to (y/n). She looked at me and took off her headphones.

"What is it Jeff?" she said.

"Well, when you were up here, BEN had an idea to have the leader to leave you alone." I said.

"He did? What's the idea?" she said.

"I'm going to be your boyfriend.." I said.

"R-Really?" she said.

I nodded and she sighed.

"What do you have to do?" she said.

"Easy, put an arm around you and give you a kiss.." I said.

Your P.O.V

"Sounds convincing enough.." you said.

He smiled and put an arm around you which made you blush. He smirked and you looked at him. You were blushing really hard when your faces were inches apart. He was about to kiss you until you hear someone calling your name.

"(Y/n)!!" a voice said.

You looked down and see your friend, Alexis

"Alexis!!" you said.

She climbed up the ramp and sat in front of you and Jeff.

"So, this is your boyfriend?" he said.

You were blushing really hard and looked away and Jeff nodded.

"Yes, I'm her boyfriend." he said pulling you closer to him and kissing you on the cheek.

"Awwwww, so cute!! When were you going to tell me?!" she said.

"Shut up.." you mumbled.

She laughed and Jeff chuckled.

"So (Y/n), did you hear about the leader?" she said.

"Don't remind me of him looking for me.." you said.

"Not that..." she said.

You were confused. 'What is she talking about?' you thought.

"Then what?" you said.

"He is coming to fight or kill your boyfriend.." she said.

"WHAT?!?!?!?!?" you and Jeff said.

.................to be continued................

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:iconangelmyra-chan:
AngelMyra-chan Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2014  Student Artist
me: ha! jeff can take him on -pushes him towards the leader- go get him
jeff: -looks up at the leader- ........god have mercy on my soul.......
me hahaha...... we're scrwed -_-'
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Comedywiz411 Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2014   Writer
Me in story: WHAT????!!!!!

Me in real life: where is he?
Alexis: Over there, *points to leader* why?
Me: Sniped :shoot:  Oh, no reason *smiles and skates away*
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Budderisveryspecial Featured By Owner May 10, 2014
OMG!! Jeff was about to kiss me!!!! ( stupid leader had to interrupt our boyfriend and girlfriend time jerk)
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FluffyShadowPaw Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
WHAT THE HECK THATS NOT HOW YOU WIN A WOMAN! YOUR NOT KILLING MAH JEFFYPO!
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:iconblue730:
blue730 Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014
Oh I knew something bad was going to happen!!!!!!!!!!
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:icontiggressia:
tiggressia Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2014
Wtf bro? °o°
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cybertoni Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
ahhh i cant find 28 can somone link it to me please 
if you do i will be forever grateful - no lie ... :crying: rvmp Cry emote 
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Noom191 Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
hoodiegirl924.deviantart.com/j…
And may Jeff survive in that part
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:iconbudderisveryspecial:
Budderisveryspecial Featured By Owner May 10, 2014
Thank you sooo much! ( give you a hug)
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:iconcybertoni:
cybertoni Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
thanxs so much Too Much Hugging 
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:iconfate-drowned:
Fate-Drowned Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
FUCK NAW *Shoots the leader* DIE BITCH DIE
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calipsoflash554 Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
lol :arc:
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tornado263263263 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Student General Artist
fighfight fight fight I really don't want them to fight over me I hate that but I do like fighting I would run in there and just for the shit of it I would kick both of their assses
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PinkieTheAnimePerson Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
O_O
JEFF'S GONNA TOTALLY EFFING KILL HIM ON ACCIDENT!!
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bonegirl3 Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2013  Student General Artist
me: yay 2 boys r gonna fight over me!!!!
Jeff: did u not hear the "kill ur bf" part?
me: oh I did
Jeff: -_- *face palm*
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TeddiBarez Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Me: *Imagining the leader is big and muscular*, Well, bye Jeffery. I'll miss you, I'll hear you in the under world.

Jeff: Shit...
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jazzmynethekiller Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013
Me: fuck the leader! He's not touching my jeffy!
Jeff: 0.0
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:iconmanicgirl155:
manicgirl155 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
THE LEADER'S GOIN' THE F*CK DOWN!!!!
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:iconrandomjellybean:
RandomJellyBean Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
XD he's so fuckedjeffy wave 
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CONNIE123456 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013
OOOOOOOOOOHHHH!!! JEFF GOT COMPETITION!!!  WOOOOOOT WOOOOOT!!! XDDDDD <3
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yuki1112 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Ok this is the best story and sooooooooooo much drama is the best!!!!!!!!! XD
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hoodiegirl924 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2013  Student Artist
thanks
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:iconoutsidefate:
OutsideFate Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013  Student Digital Artist
I know you probably don't like me much, but read this: comments.deviantart.com/1/4097…

It pretty much sums up every gripe in the story.
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:iconhoodiegirl924:
hoodiegirl924 Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013  Student Artist
So, basically your problem with my story is my grammar, characters out of character, more of a scrip than a story, and that I'm a horrible writer. Wow, that's something...
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MinecraftLady1112 Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Don't listen to him/her, he/she just needs a peanut butter and jealous sandwich with a side of hater tots :)
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:iconhoodiegirl924:
hoodiegirl924 Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Student Artist
I really don't listen to him but I just want to know whats his problem with my stories.
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:iconoutsidefate:
OutsideFate Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013  Student Digital Artist
You should stop. Your writing is cringeworthy at best and an absolute pain to read at worst.
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:iconmelanyco:
Melanyco Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013
If that is your opinion, I won't stop you. But keep in mind your are NOT the only person who reads this. Other people read it and some like it, some hate it, and some just.. Meh. Now go ahead and hate, but seriously. No. Don't. I think the author is trying his/her very best.
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:iconoutsidefate:
OutsideFate Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013  Student Digital Artist
The problem about this is that it is objectively bad. Awful, even.

It bears the cardinal sin of being fan-wank for a person knowing nothing about the written media:

:bulletred: It is written in script-form.
:bulletred: Every character is out of character.
:bulletred: P.O.V. Changes are announced in bold.
:bulletred: P.O.V. Changes in general.
:bulletred: It indulges into the awkward sexual fantasies of the writer at an uncomfortable level.
:bulletred: There is less than half a page if th script is broken down.
:bulletred: (Y/N)
:bulletred: Abysmal grammar: "...but BEN gave me a his 'I have an idea' look."
:bulletred: the story makes so many leaps in logic it might as well be directed by M. Night Shyamalan.

And it's not like they have had too little time to improve and collect feedback. Nooooo. 27 fucking parts and the writer doesn't even check for typos.
I know I am pulling a serious strawman here, but look at her gallery: hoodiegirl924.deviantart.com/g…
Not a single piece of original content. All of that is against dA's ToS. All ripped from google images. That's not the telltale sign of a person trying hard.
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Chinxino Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Other people dont need to say ur a bitch bcoz that just starts a fight and it put ppl in a bad mood. I dont mean to start a fight with u im just saying what i am thinking bcoz i think the author has created an amazing story and its very well thought through. I dont want them to feel bad about it.
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:iconoutsidefate:
OutsideFate Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Student Digital Artist
It isn't good. If you think it's good, you need to re-evaluate your life.
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:iconchinxino:
Chinxino Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hey i was trying to help the author and try get u to be nicer without being rude but maybe u really are a bitch. Ur acting like one by saying that we all should get a life wwhen i think its u who needs to get some manners and learn how to be kind, thats when u are nice and empathetic and not picking on people because you dont like how they write.
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:iconchinxino:
Chinxino Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Look dude, I am not going to tell u to shut up or anything coz i know you wont but seriously, if you dont like the story then dont read it bcoz saying that the author is crap and not good at writing just makes u sound mean and people will write mean things to you. So what if she/he makes mistakes, they may not try that hard on it and it doesnt matter because people are here to enjoy the plot and the story. I just started putting up my first story and if i were to get a coment like that then i would get quite upset. If u think the story is crap then dont read it and dont comment mean things because others read this story and people think its really good so dont spoil the mood. You could have really upset the author and what good is that going to do? This is their first story so they may be inexperienced and i know they have had a lot of chapters to improve but it could just be a little hobby for fun. Heaps of people use (y/n) and i dont see the problem, they might enjoy writing like that and it makes it as though your in the story. So if u dont have anything nice to say dont say anything at all and everyone will be happy. :D c:
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:iconmelanyco:
Melanyco Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013
Okay, your right.. Doesn't mean I can actually make better stories <.<
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:iconoutsidefate:
OutsideFate Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013  Student Digital Artist
I am sure you can. Just try to build them from a storytelling model.
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:iconmelanyco:
Melanyco Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013
Aw, thanks for the advice! :)
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:iconoutsidefate:
OutsideFate Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Also, a fun character generation process I have is to turn an abstract concept, like "An inward-coiling spiral" into a character, trying to embody how the concept works and base the character around that.
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jeffthekiller46 Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:iconfuplz:
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:iconoutsidefate:
OutsideFate Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2013  Student Digital Artist
wow such original  
                                                 much finger
           
             wow
           
                                      very edge
          large rebel

                                                             
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jeffthekiller46 Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I know,im lame :iconemocornerplz:
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Zyra01 Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2013
That's up to the writer to decide if he wants to stop or not. If you don't like it then don't read it.
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Mesocyclonegirl Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013
Hey, try and be more positive! :shakeleaf:
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:iconoutsidefate:
OutsideFate Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013  Student Digital Artist
How about no? They have had 27 parts to improve, and it's only getting worse.
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jazzmynethekiller Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013
Dude you need to do these things
1. Shut the hell up.
2. Stop being a bitch.
3. Stop being a hater.
4. Go and fuck yourself.
5. Stop being a fucker. You're ruing the story for a lot of pepole.
6. Grow a dick and live with it.
7. Apologize to the author. He/she probally worked very hard on this. It is very sad you have the audacity to be a total jerk to him/ her.
Don't like it? Well tough titty! Suck on that!
Damn. Bitches these days.
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OutsideFate Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Dude, I don't need to do any of that.
1: Can't make me do it.
2: Glass houses.
3: "Hater" is apperantly reduced to the same level as "troll" was in 2011...
4: I would very much like that, but my dick sadly just isn't long enough.
5: Story is pre-ruined. comments.deviantart.com/1/4097… <--- Proof of said accusation.
6: Thank you very much for the advice, but my boyfriend is rather happy with the dick I already have.
7: Never. And no, they didn't.
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jazzmynethekiller Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2013
i ony have 2 thing to say.
1. you are a gay ass prick
2. glass houses. seriously? that makes no sense at all.
now look whos being immature.
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:iconoutsidefate:
OutsideFate Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2013  Student Digital Artist
1: Oh really? What made you think? The fact I have the sweetest hunk of a boyfriend?
2: idioms.thefreedictionary.com/P…
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:iconmesocyclonegirl:
Mesocyclonegirl Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013
I don't have an opinion on the story too much, its okay I suppose. I understand your logic though.
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NizzyThaAllStar Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
OH SHIT ! IT'S BOUTA GO DOWN !!!!! XD !
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Holyumakerel Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2013
Request: Fuyona Clapping
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